Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Due to
some hard economic circumstances in
this
era, some families have both
parents
working,
while
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some
parents
are of
the
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belief
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that they could keep their
children
with other family members, others believe that the childcare
centers
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are the best alternative to take
care
of their offspring. I am a proponent of the second point of view. In
this
essay, I will clarify my theory with relevant examples.
To begin
with, the first viewpoint; leaving
children
with grandparents is an easy solution for some breadwinners,
however
, the vast majority of these seniors are suffering from old age diseases, they need domestic helpers to take
care
of them,
therefore
this
would not be a practical solution.
For instance
, in
Egypt
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some
parents
who work full-time jobs, hire babysitters to take
care
of their offspring
instead
of keeping them with their grandparents.
additionally
, they would send their grandparents to
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elderly
homes where they will receive
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better
care
.
On the other hand
, some advocate that
care
centers
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are specialists in providing these services for those
parents
who both work,
firstly
, they provide extra services
such
as teaching
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education to
children
,
secondly
, they play a significant role in raising
children
with great values.
For instance
, in my
hometown
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some
care
centers
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have a
briliant
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brilliant
reputation
in
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children
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caring
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and
this
what
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makes people outside my city send their
children
to these
centers
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.
Hence
, even
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guardians have the opportunity, they would keep their
children
there. In conclusion,
although
it depends on each one choice and whether they can afford to pay
care
centers
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fees or not, I would argue that if the
centers
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are providing more than caring services, they are definitely the best choice
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