The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.
The graphs provide information about the individual's devices utilized to watch TV channels in Canada Over 10 years.
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'conventional TV was the highest gadget used by more than a quarter over 30%
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the general proportion in 2009.
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lap top was experienced rise percentage about 20%,
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tablet was the least figure from all categories
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. It is evident that conventional TV started with a high rate from other kinds of people using gadgets in Canada whiles 10 years period .similary became the per cent age of the flat screens about 27%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • gadgets
  • utilized
  • age categories
  • watching TV channels
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • notable trends
  • increase/decrease
  • devices
  • decade
  • advancements in technology
  • user preferences
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • conclusion
  • implications
  • technology and media companies
  • lifestyle
  • habits
  • target age group
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