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now a days many people coose to be self-empoyed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed

#people #coose #work #company #organization #be #case
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Employment
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 plays a very crucial role in one life. Through
employment
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,
people
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 tend to get the wages to get basic the necessities of life. There are two different types of categories of
employment
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.
Firstly
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, is working as an employee for some organization.
Secondly
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, is
the
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self
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self-employment
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employment
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 where a person doesn’t
work
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 under some boss, rather he is a boss and a worker himself.
Self-
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Self-employment
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employment
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 has two different types
such
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 as the individual owns his own business and the second option is working as a freelancer.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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,
people
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 prefer to be
self employed
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self-employed
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 than
working
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work
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 for other organizations. When
taking
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talking
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 about the
people
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 who opt to invest in their personal businesses. One of the possible
reason
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reasons
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 for
this
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 type could
the
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 availability of resources
such
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 as money, space, workers etc.
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,
the
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IT
people
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 today prefer to
work
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 as a freelancer on different platforms named as Fiverr, Freelancer, Upwork etc
,.
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,
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It
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professionals
to select
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selecting
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freelacing
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freelancing
instead
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 of working for software houses is that these organizations do not pay enough. The workers spend a lot of time,
effort
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and effort
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 on there but in
return
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,return
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 they neither get appreciation nor enough resources like wages, transport expenses, medical
facility
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facilities
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,
sport
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sports
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 area and many more to survive.
They
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The
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people
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 there a highly skilled and they
thzink
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think
 that they could
a
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do a
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lot more than what they are being paid. With the pros like earning a lot more than what they are being paid, there are many cons of being
self employed
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self-employed
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. Some of them are
people
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become
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who become
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introvert
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introverted
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. They do not like to sit in the company of
other
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others
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. They would not be socially active and take part in different conversations. There is a possibility that these individuals are not capable enough to
work
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 with
group
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a group
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 of
people
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. In future, they may face
lack
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a lack
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 of experience to
work
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 in some multi-national organization. In conclusion,
self-employed
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 is not an option to select but it has its own advantages and disadvantages. A Person may select self-
employment
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 over the other one but he should take a decide decision after thorough consideration so that he may not regret it in the future.
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