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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this weigh the disadvantages?

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Primary school
education
 has always impacted a
student
 in some way. A good primary
education
 program would not only build the
student
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it
also
 encourages
student
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the student
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 to
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explore
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themselves
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. Primary learning plays a very vital role than
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secondary school. Primary educational strategies should
also
 include teaching both national and international
language
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languages
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 to students. Teaching languages
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 lower classes is vital for learners. The guidance and teaching for foreign languages
such
 as English, German, Chinese etc
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 should be motivated. There are several benefits associated
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 learning a
language
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 stage. The primary classes should
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at least
 focus to teach one of the foreign languages. The best strategy is to teach a globally accepted
language
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English. When a person will start learning the
language
 from the beginning, he would be able to have a strong grip
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reading, writing, speaking, and listening. In
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younger ages, the human brain is more active and is capable of absorbing things. Learning from a low
level
also
 helps the
student
 to understand the
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syntactically
synthetically
 and semantically correct meaning of
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word
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 of
language
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the language
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.
Moreover
,
this
 could
also
 be valuable for the
student
 to increase
the
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 vocabulary. The foreign
language
 could be
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valueable
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valuable
assets
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asset
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 for the people who intend to have a higher
education
 from abroad.
In addition
, when the person starts his career, he should be capable enough to present his thoughts in words.
This
 would not only help him to settle and get a better job within a country but it might
also
 act as a
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stronger
 tool to earn a chance of working in some foreign organization.
Along with
 a lot of pros, there are some cons
such
 as the
student
 might not
attentive
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 to learn more about the national
language
 but the benefits linked with
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learning and engaging through a foreign
language
 are always greater than learning a secondary
level
. Secondary
level
 studies should be more
focuing
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focusing
 towards the direction in which
child
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 wants to excel.
To sum up
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primary
education
 acts as a base
therefore
, it is highly recommended to make a learner learn
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a foreign
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language
 at
primary
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level
 rather than
secondary
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 standard. Foreign
language
 always opens up more paths in
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 longer run.
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