The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
The chart shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000. At the beginning of the period, 
fish
and
chips
had the highest
number
of
times
eaten per year among 
three
Correct article usage
the three
show examples
fast food. The figure was the same as 100.   
In contrast
, the consumption of
hamburgers
and
pizza
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
show examples
around 10
times
and 5
times
, respectively.
After
this
time, the
number
of
times
hamburgers
eaten
Add a missing verb
were eaten
show examples
increased sharply at about the same rate to 1985, but  the
number
of
times
fish
and
chips
eaten
Add a missing verb
were eaten
show examples
went up and down to 1985. These figures were 85
times
and 95
times
in 1985, respectively. between 1985 and 2000,
threre
Correct your spelling
there
was an interesting change. Growth in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
amount of consumption in  
hamburgers
and
pizza
grew steadily
while
number
Change the article
a number
the number
show examples
of
times
eaten
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
fish
and
chips
plummeted remarkably.
As a
result
Add a comma
,result
show examples
the figures
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
hamburgers
and
pizza
were more than one
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
fish
and
chips
.
Overall
, it is seen that  
hamburgers
and
pizza
experienced
stable
Correct article usage
a stable
show examples
growth pattern between 1975 and 2000. Meanwhile, the amount of
fish
and
chips
consumption rose with fluctuating.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, number, times, hamburgers, pizza with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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