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The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
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The line graph illustrates the average yearly spend on different types of mobile
phone
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services
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 in the United States, namely cell
phone
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, national
fixed-line
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, and international
fixed-line
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 service over the
period
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 of ten years, starting from 2001.
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, it can be seen that Cell
phone
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services
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 showing an upward trend throughout the time. The opposite was true for National
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services
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. International
fixed-line
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services
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,
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 with others, remained unchanged for a certain
period
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 of time. In 2001, National
fixed-line
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services
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 had the highest expenditure of $700,
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, the figures significantly declined over the years,
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 up at $400 in 2010.
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, Cell
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services
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 the lowest average annual expense ($200) in the beginning, but later rapidly increased, hitting a peak of approximately $750
at the end
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 of the
period
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 by the end of the
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. International
fixed-line
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services
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 figures saw a slight fluctuation of approximately $320 in the first four years before levelling off at $300 from 2004 to 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services, fixed-line, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
  • innovation
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