Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the interest of global prosperity, developed

countries

urge to assist economic aid for underdeveloped nations as a poverty salvage. It is considered that they ought to support alternative assistance in place of financial help. Here, I partially agree with

this

viewpoint. First of all, I believe that money is a crucial means for every

nations

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to operate their society,

government

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and government

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. Economic growth

increase

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state capacity and

provide

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the public goods and services that their citizens need,

such

as health care, education,

social

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and social

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security. Vietnam, in a hardship situation after

stated

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the triumph declaration of victory in 1975, had been

struggle

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to regenerate the country.

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of ceaseless efforts of enrichment accompanied

with

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by

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generous

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the generous

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support of international friends, Vietnam nowadays has made

a

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incredible development, as they are now a developing country with high life quality and

potential

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emerging market for international investment.

However

, not all of the poor

countries

with money assistance can utilise their budget.

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, numerous African

countries

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in extreme poverty

such

as Chad, Congo,

Nigeria,...can't

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and Nigeria,...can't

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get through tough

circumstance

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although

worldwide economic assistance was called to aid them.

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is because these supporting means

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just for a temporary period which is not stable for the national long-term growth.

Thus

, alternative sources with

multitude

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of feasibility and sustainability

is

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the investment and aid from education to

health

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care system or advancing

human's

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right

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. Norway, Sweden, Denmark and Luxembourg, these generous

countries

are on

there

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way

of

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making other types of help to impact the world positively. In conclusion, I think aiding

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for

countries

facing

economical

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difficult

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is greatly important, but to long-lasting

the

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apply

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advantages and stably develop for the sake of its future, affluent

countries

should concentrate on the education, health care and people life's quality.