Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the interest of global prosperity, developed
countries
urge to assist economic aid for underdeveloped nations as a poverty salvage. It is considered that they ought to support alternative assistance in place of financial help. Here, I partially agree with this
viewpoint.
First of all, I believe that money is a crucial means for every nations
to operate their society, Change to a singular noun
nation
government
. Economic growth Correct word choice
and government
increase
state capacity and Change the verb form
increases
provide
the public goods and services that their citizens need, Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
such
as health care, education, social
security. Vietnam, in a hardship situation after Correct word choice
and social
stated
the triumph declaration of victory in 1975, had been Wrong verb form
stating
struggle
to regenerate the country. Change the verb form
struggling
struggled
As a result
of ceaseless efforts of enrichment accompanied with
Change preposition
by
generous
support of international friends, Vietnam nowadays has made Add an article
the generous
a
incredible development, as they are now a developing country with high life quality and Change the article
an
potential
emerging market for international investment.
Correct article usage
a potential
However
, not all of the poor countries
with money assistance can utilise their budget. For instance
, numerous African countries
live
in extreme poverty Correct pronoun usage
that live
such
as Chad, Congo, Nigeria,...can't
get through tough Correct word choice
and Nigeria,...can't
circumstance
Fix the agreement mistake
circumstances
although
worldwide economic assistance was called to aid them. This
is because these supporting means was
just for a temporary period which is not stable for the national long-term growth. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Thus
, alternative sources with multitude
of feasibility and sustainability Add an article
a multitude
the multitude
is
the investment and aid from education to Change the verb form
are
health
care system or advancing Correct article usage
the health
human's
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human
right
. Norway, Sweden, Denmark and Luxembourg, these generous Fix the agreement mistake
rights
countries
are on there
way Replace the word
their
of
making other types of help to impact the world positively.
In conclusion, I think aiding Change preposition
to
budget
for Correct article usage
the budget
countries
facing economical
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economic
difficult
is greatly important, but to long-lasting Replace the word
difficulties
the
advantages and stably develop for the sake of its future, affluent Correct article usage
apply
countries
should concentrate on the education, health care and people life's quality.Submitted by boocheapofficial on
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