The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.
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The two maps of the
centre
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of the towns of Islip give information about the
city
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. currently and in the future.
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, a lot of modifications can be observed during the forecast development. First of all,
according to
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the current
map
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the
centre
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is close Ibo a countryside. A main road deserves houses, a school, several shops and a park. Looking more closely at the map predicting the future development of the
city
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, a lot of modifications can be observed. The size of the
centre
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will increase
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an oval shape;
therefore
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the countryside will disappear.
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, the single road will be replaced by a bigger
dual carriageway
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. A pedestrian way will deserve the central area. New houses will be built with new facilities
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as a bus station and
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parking. The shops will be grouped in a shopping mall. The next point is the garden area which will be smaller. As the
city
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will have more people the school will be bigger.
To sum up
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, between the actual map of Islip town
centre
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and the future planned development, a lot of modifications are predicted. On the one
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the
city
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will be bigger with more facilities.
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the park will be reduced and the countryside will disappear. The
city
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will have changed a great deal.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Redevelopment
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrianization
  • Residential area
  • Landscaping
  • Community impact
  • Public transport
  • Commercial zone
  • Environmental footprint
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