The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plan for its development.
The two maps of the
centre
of the towns of Islip give information about the city
.
currently and in the future. Overall
, a lot of modifications can be observed during the forecast development.
First of all, according to
the current map
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,map
centre
is
close
Ibo a countryside. A main
road deserves houses, a school, several shops and a park. Looking more closely at the map predicting the future development of the city
, a lot of modifications can be observed. The size of the centre
will increase in
an oval shape; Change preposition
to
therefore
the countryside will disappear. Moreover
, the single road will be replaced by a bigger dual carriageway
. A pedestrian way will deserve the central area. New houses will be built with new facilities Add a hyphen
dual-carriageway
such
as a bus station and a
parking. The shops will be grouped in a shopping mall. The next point is the garden area which will be smaller. As the Remove the article
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city
will have more people the school will be bigger.
To sum up
, between the actual map of Islip town centre
and the future planned development, a lot of modifications are predicted. On the one hand
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,hand
city
will be bigger with more facilities. On the other
hand
the park will be reduced and the countryside will disappear. The Add a comma
,hand
city
will have changed a great deal.Submitted by faiz3177 on
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