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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

#technology #workplaces #work
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the work
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work place
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workplace
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technology
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a technology
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 which
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 essential in daily life. In my opinion, it makes
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 easier and faster than previously and
Technology
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 can certainly make life effortless, but it's important to remember to disconnect and enjoy the present moment.
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technology
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 has
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 the environment and brought
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many benefits, to illustrate, It has changed the way how
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work
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, which
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 faster.
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 a lot of employees just to account
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 for
company
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the company
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.
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, now and because of
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,
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 became much more easier and effortless by using modern devices,
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laptop
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, pc,
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 and to name a few.
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,
technology
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provide
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 flexibility in
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 which means it made
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 easy.
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, it supports remote working, online trading etc. Despite of benefits of
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, It
also
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 can lead to another side if
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to
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 much on It. To demonstrate, depending on
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 causes
increasing
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 unemployment rate. Because
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 globalization has developed more and more.
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example
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 artificial intelligence
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 the potential to replace certain jobs and robots for industries.
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 they are faster and
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more accuracy
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accuracy
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 which can lead to displacement and
decrease
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a decrease
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 in demand for certain types of employment.
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another
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 drawbacks come out
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relying
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 is
failures
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inspite
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in spite
 of advancement.
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 is not infallible.
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, technical glitches, system failures or power outages
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can disrupt daily activities and services that heavily rely on
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.
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transaction
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,
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technology
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 has changed the way how
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work
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.
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, still there are
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 who are technophobe which means they are terrified of
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. In conclusion,
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 has
huge
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 impact
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 on
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, which can guide to
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 disadvantages. If
people
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 use
technology
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 wisely and
for
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 essential ways, the world would be magnificent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • software applications
  • high-speed internet
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • geographical boundaries
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • skill gaps
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • dependency
  • security risks
  • data breaches
  • cyber attacks
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