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The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.

The line graph compares the average number of people in the UK traveling daily by car, bus and train over a period of 60 years.
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The given line graph illustrates the average
number
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 of UK
commuters
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 using
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car
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cars
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,
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bus
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buses
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 or trains
train
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 to travel over a 60-year period, starting from 1970.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
number
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 of British people using cars
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as well as
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 trains
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and train
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train
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trains
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 has increased gradually during the period from 1970 to 2030,
whereas
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 the figure for
bus
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users
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 has fallen steadily.
Moreover
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, it can be seen that
car
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 is the most popular means of transport used by British
commuters
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 for travelling. In 1970, approximately 5
million
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 UK
commuters
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 travelled by
car
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 on a daily basis.
On the other hand
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, there were about 4
million
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bus
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users
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 and 2
million
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train
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users
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.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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 of
car
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 and
train
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users
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 continued to rise until it
leveled
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levelled
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 levelled out at 7
million
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 and 3
million
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 respectively in 2000.
Nevertheless
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, there was a small drop of nearly 0,5
million
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 in the
number
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 of
bus
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users
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 . Eventually, it reached the same level as
train
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users
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 did in 2015. In 2030, the
number
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 of British people using cars
car
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 is expected to reach almost 9
million
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.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of
train
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users
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 is
also
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 predicted to rise to nearly 5
million
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.
In contrast
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, buses are anticipated to be the less popular choice among UK
commuters
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 with only 3
million
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users
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, commuters, car, bus, train, users, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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