The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph presents information about the percentage of people aged 65 and over in Japan, Sweden and the USA during the period from 1940 to 2040. The proportion of the USA was the highest during the first 60 years, and it basically remained unchanged from 1980 to 2020. From 2020 onwards, there was a sharp increase in the USA
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the percentage rose from about 15% to almost 25%. There was a similar trend in the proportion of
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65 and over in Sweden, rising from around 6% to roughly 14%, and the growth was rapid since the 1990s. The figure for Sweden became the highest between 2000 and 2020,
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it showed a decline around 2020.
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the figure for Japan grew dramatically at the beginning of around 2030, it remained the lowest for 90 consecutive years by 2030.
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, these three countries were all in an upward trend, and Japan showed the most significant change throughout the 100-year period.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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