The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020,with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020,with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The given graph highlights information about the portion of the population in four diverse Asian territories who lived in conurbations from 1970 to 2020,and
also
it predicts ratios for the coming years; 2030
as well as
2040.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were upward trends in all mentioned years with the exception of Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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where
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experienced
fluctuated
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trends in the first half of the period. Another striking point is that all cities are about to have increasing figures for the far future. Looking at the details, Indonesia was the least popular city for residing in 1970 with 13% but
then
its percentage increased dramatically and hit a peak
with
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55% in 2022 and it is going to reach approximately 60% in 2040; it means it would be ranked second. Followingly, the portion of Thailand started at under 20% and went up 29%
while
its amount remained stable by 2020 it is about to improve
45
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% by 2040 and will have the lowest ratio among citizens. If we look at
Philippines'
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the Philippines'
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portion, it commenced at 33% which was the highest amount but
then
it fluctuated during the whole period and stopped at 44% ; its prediction displays
the
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percentage of 50% by 2040 which would make it ranked third. Ultimately, the ratio of
Malaysa
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Malaysia
embarked on 30% and in 1990 reached 45%
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it rocketed
around
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to around
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80% in 2022 and it will hit a peak
with
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at
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82% in 2030.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • changes over time
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • urbanization
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • rural areas
  • metropolitan areas
  • migration
  • industrialization
  • environmental impact
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