Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to community? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's economic situation with high inflationary pressures,
people
are more and more squeezed up with low-income levels
coupled with
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savings to support some of their necessary requirements
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instance, medical and child schooling is one of the classic examples. I do agree that long-term job seekers in receipt of
government
benefits must do and contribute
in
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voluntary
work
. In every
society
, professionals are the backbone of
society
and they have reached
this
level
by
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the support and guidance of the
government
and community,
therefore
after reaching
at
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this
level it is their
time
to pay back to
the
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society
. As an example, many children in underdeveloped countries who are residing in slums are deprived
from
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the
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basic education, their parents cannot afford to send them to schools,
therefore
if
government
professionals can spare some
time
to teach them during their free
time
it would certainly be the game changer in the
society
. We have many examples of some of these kids now becoming CEOs or high-level executives in multinational
organizations
across the globe.
Furthermore
, another benefit of voluntary
work
is cost savings for
the
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government
organizations
. Qualified professional
people
are very expensive to hire
therefore
, if these professionals can spare some of their hours in providing services to different
government
organizations
it will certainly reduce the cost of these
organizations
.
For example
, if doctors of
government
hospitals can devote some
time
in
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providing their services to different hospitals free of charge, that will create
lot
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of benefits
to
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poor and needy
people
and not only that it will save a hefty amount in the health budget which can be used or diverted to other important areas. In conclusion, voluntary
work
is always a positive contributor
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society
with many benefits for the poor and underprivileged
people
. Most of the developed nations have made volunteer
work
mandatory for
its
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government
employees and have
points
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system so that these
people
can
also
be rewarded with some awards or certificates as an appreciation
to
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their
work
.
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