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Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to community? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's economic situation with high inflationary pressures,
people
 are more and more squeezed up with low-income levels
coupled with
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 savings to support some of their necessary requirements
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 instance, medical and child schooling is one of the classic examples. I do agree that long-term job seekers in receipt of
government
 benefits must do and contribute
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 voluntary
work
. In every
society
, professionals are the backbone of
society
 and they have reached
this
 level
by
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 the support and guidance of the
government
 and community,
therefore
 after reaching
at
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this
 level it is their
time
 to pay back to
the
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society
. As an example, many children in underdeveloped countries who are residing in slums are deprived
from
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the
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basic education, their parents cannot afford to send them to schools,
therefore
 if
government
 professionals can spare some
time
 to teach them during their free
time
 it would certainly be the game changer in the
society
. We have many examples of some of these kids now becoming CEOs or high-level executives in multinational
organizations
 across the globe.
Furthermore
, another benefit of voluntary
work
 is cost savings for
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government
organizations
. Qualified professional
people
 are very expensive to hire
therefore
, if these professionals can spare some of their hours in providing services to different
government
organizations
 it will certainly reduce the cost of these
organizations
.
For example
, if doctors of
government
 hospitals can devote some
time
in
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 providing their services to different hospitals free of charge, that will create
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 of benefits
to
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 poor and needy
people
 and not only that it will save a hefty amount in the health budget which can be used or diverted to other important areas. In conclusion, voluntary
work
 is always a positive contributor
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society
 with many benefits for the poor and underprivileged
people
. Most of the developed nations have made volunteer
work
 mandatory for
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government
 employees and have
points
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 system so that these
people
 can
also
 be rewarded with some awards or certificates as an appreciation
to
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 their
work
.
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