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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there is a great economic and social imbalance between cities and regional districts in many countries.
Therefore
, governments try to create
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 conditions for large companies and persuade them to move their
production
 to local areas. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of
this
 trend and provide some
conclusion
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.
Firstly
,
the
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production
 expansion gives an amazing impulse for the development of regional areas. With
the
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state support industries create new workplaces, build residential infrastructure around their enterprises, and create other necessary conditions for people's lives. It is obviously, one of the main positives of
this
 trend.
Besides
, moving outside the big cities allows companies to reduce expenses for taxes, wages, and other costs.
In addition
 to
this
, businesses spread their
production
 and sales market and ultimately receive additional benefits. Turning to the other side of the argument, some companies might face
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complex logistical and organizational problems in new places. It means that the cost of their goods and services will increase. Possible buyers and consumers of services will probably suffer from
this
. Another issue is that very often large corporations completely forget about nature pollution when they move
production
 to new locations. It might lead to a serious negative impact on the environment like water, soil, or air wasting. In conclusion, moving manufacturing to the regional areas might have advantages and drawbacks for business
as well as
 for local citizens, and government in general. In my opinion, with government support,
such
 pros as accelerating the development of territories, expanding the sales market, etc. can outweigh
such
 cons as cost increases and potential natural pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional areas
  • big cities
  • encouraging
  • industries
  • businesses
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • economic growth
  • overcrowding
  • traffic congestion
  • employment opportunities
  • balanced regional development
  • preservation of natural resources
  • quality of life
  • cultural diversity
  • lack of infrastructure
  • amenities
  • skilled workers
  • impact on the environment
  • decline in the economy
  • social and cultural challenges
  • integrating
  • new industries
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