Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with the statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays in
this
modern era, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
societies are becoming materialistic with more focus on earning money without Correct article usage
apply
concerning
about how and its source. Replace the word
concern
This
is primarily a
sole reason for more criminal Correct article usage
the
activities
in our society
. Most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
think that once a person becomes criminal
, he will always be a criminal, Correct article usage
a criminal
however
I do not agree with Add a comma
,however
the
statement at all. With proper guidance and thorough rehabilitation, the criminal can be a nice person with Correct determiner usage
this
having
an understanding of right and wrong.
One of the most important aspects of any justice system is to make sure that Unnecessary verb
apply
criminals
get a proper punishment for what he
did wrong and to make sure that it will not be repeated again. Correct pronoun usage
they
For
this
reason
many countries have Add a comma
,reason
a
rehabilitation Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
centers
and plans to run the proper Change the spelling
centres
pro-punishments
programs in jails so that the person can understand by himself the right path. Correct your spelling
pro-punishment
Also
there will be programs for jail inmates to have some kind of skill training so that they can contribute to Add a comma
,Also
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
in positive
Change the article
a positive
manner
after serving their sentences. In US and Europe
all criminal Add a comma
,Europe
people
have been trained on a particular skill to integrate them in
Change preposition
into
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
and have their live hood in respectable
Change the article
a respectable
manner
once they are out.
In every society
the role of its people
is very important, many societies are reformist societies where criminals
can be mentored by noble people
in a positive way to integrate with the society
so that they can contribute in a good manner
. If criminals
will be left on their own without having any mentoring or coaching, then
obviously they will have tendency
to do Add an article
a tendency
the tendency
the
criminal Correct article usage
apply
activities
again and again. In many countries
Add a comma
,countries
criminals
are mentored in jails and they are tracked about their code of conduct, the one
with good Correct pronoun usage
ones
record
got relaxation in Fix the agreement mistake
records
the
sentence which is a good motivator for them to come back Change the word
their
in
Change preposition
to
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
in a positive manner
. Also
some Governments have placement groups whose role is to take these Add a comma
,Also
criminals
once they finished their sentences and make them placed in some jobs with proper monitoring of their activities
till they get fully immersed in the
Correct article usage
apply
society
.
To conclude
, criminals
require proper mentoring and rehabilitation to make them integrate with the
Correct article usage
apply
society
, the role of justice
system is not only to punish them rather is to make them beneficial for Add an article
the justice
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
and their country so they cannot turn back to the
criminal Correct article usage
apply
activities
again.Submitted by faseehkhan on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.