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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing school and starting universities.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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In
majority
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 of the countries , people
advice
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 young
adults
 to travel to obtain experience that would be beneficial for tertiary education .
While
 many people think
this
 is advantageous there are people who believe
this
 would result in major drawbacks . On one hand , it is important for young
adults
 to travel the world so they acquire experience that could help them during their university period .
For instance
 , it's very common in Europe for a family to send their children to a
neighboring
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 country alone so they learn how to overcome difficult
situation
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such
 as
traveling
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 alone , getting a job etc ,
moreover
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 it will help the young
adults
 to obtain soft skills that the school will not provide and would have a significant impact on their lives .
On the other hand
 ,
traveling
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 for a year could result
is
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 valuable time lost , nowadays the competition to get
in to
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 a university is quite competitive. Young
adults
 should try to use
this
 time to do an additional course which would help their chances to get into universities much higher .
For example
 , going to a workshop or trying for an internship would
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benefit
benifit
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benefit
 an individual more than
traveling
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 outside for a year In conclusion ,
traveling
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 for a year before joining
university
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a university
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 might have a positive outcome
however
 it could result in major disadvantages
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