Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give yoytur own opinion

While
it is commonly
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thought
though
by some
people
that
traffic
accidents
should be reduced by severe
punishments
, others
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that more effective in
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road
safety . In my
opinion
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a key for
reduce
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reducing
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traffic
accidents
is a combination of two approaches On the one hand , it is argued by some that driving should be
stricly
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strictly
punished is the key to reducing
traffic
accidents
. The main reason is
thatt
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that
people
always
fears
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fear
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about
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serious fines in
traffic
therefore
they avoid
traffic
accidents
that make them get
stict
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strict
stuck
punishments
. One good
illustation
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illustration
of
this
is my brother got punishment because he hit another’s car
last
week.
On the other hand
, it is strongly
belived
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believed
by others that improving
road
safely
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will have better results.
People
often have
this
opinion because having safer roads the drivers will
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feel
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more secure and they can
also
drive safely.As a
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results
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my fathers had
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when he was driving on
the
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degraded
road
and had a lot of indentations. In
conlution
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conclusion
,
while
some
people
think a key
for
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to
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reducing
traffice
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traffic
accidents
is severe
punishments
, others
belive
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believe
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that more better results when the
road
is improved . Personally , I tend to
belive
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believe
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that we should balance two ways to reduce
traffic
accidents
. Having better roads and
having
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better
punishments
.
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