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More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicines should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

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In our modern days,it is believed that an increasing amount of people are suffering from
health
 problems caused by our sedentary lifestyle,the problems of
health
 can not be cured with modern medicines.Some people have an opinion that we ought to return to traditional
medicine
 to treat
the
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health
 problems.
This
 essay mostly agrees with the statement and will give two reasons to back up my position.
To begin
 with,sometimes traditional
medicine
 can surprisingly treat fatal diseases.In simple words,
the
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health
 situation,where modern
medicine
 can do nothing,traditional
medicine
 can absolutely get rid of
disease
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.
For instance
,there was a man that suffered from lung
disease
.Unfortunately,doctors said that he left to live only 4 months.
However
,the man
have
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 not wanted to die and did his best to cure his
disease
.,Afterwards he tried Kazakh national
medicine
, which involves drinking kumis and spending time in the steppe.Wonderly,when he came back and went to the hospital, doctors said that he somehow had cured the
disease
.
This
 example precisely shows that we can rely on alternative
medicine
.
Secondly
,alternative
medicine
 will not adversely affect human organisms.What I wanted to say is that
,
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the
medicine
 only cures illnesses,given the fact that it is mostly made from plants,except for the
chinese
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 traditional
medicine
,which involves needles.Reversely,sometimes modern
medicine
 can make our
health
 condition worse
,
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if the patient was cured
unproperly
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. In conclusion,traditional
medicine
 can cure situations where modern
medicine
 is powerless.In ,addition alternative
medicine
 only gives benefits to the human body.Not for one moment should you avoid traditional
medicine
.
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