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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits

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It is certainly true that video
games
 as harmless fun.
While
 accepting that, I believe that playing
games
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more likely to have a harmful impact / negative outcomes. On the one hand, there are several
benefits
 of video
games
 offer people several
benefits
. A common advantage is that Playing
game
 is a stress reliever. What happens in the
game
 is just fake, it’s all imagination. So the player
game
 can comfortably play without worrying about any possible consequences. Your success in overcoming challenges, completing goals, or achieving high scores in the
game
 will create a feeling of satisfaction.
This
 can help lift your mood and reduce stress. Another positive aspect can be that playing
games
 is
also
 a thought-provoking educational method. Specifically, in combat
games
,
players
 must calculate and consider strategies intelligently to destroy the enemy and win
On the other hand
, I am of the opinion that these
benefits
 can be outweighed by the drawbacks. One obvious disadvantage is that
Game
 addicts Specifically, excessive gaming will lead to
players
 not being able to control their entertainment and daily activities
such
 as working, studying, etc.
Players
 who play
games
 for a long time will be affected by their health. health, including: impaired vision, lack of alertness... Another negative effect is that bad influence on
players
.
According to
 research, people who often play violent
games
 tend to be angry and easily attack others. In conclusion,
although
 video
games
 gives several
benefits
, it is obvious that the drawback of it is very much My view is that drawback can cause more harm than
benefits
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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