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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in different places in childhood

#places #childhood
In recent years, there is an increasing number of families
have
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to
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 move to different
places
due to
 their job requirements or for other purposes.
While
 some child psychologists have claimed that children could learn more by living in
distintive
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distinctive
places
 and talking to diverse people in their early life, others claimed that those actions would dramatically impact
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their children’s mentality. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss the merits and demerits of both notions.
To begin
 with, the most overwhelming
merits
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that
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 children would develop social skills, and broaden their horizons after meeting diverse individuals and new cultures. It
is widely believe
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 that children at
young
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 age seem likely to learn new things quicker than adults,
hence
, it is beneficial for them to enrich their
knowlege
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knowledge
.
Last
 but not least, another
benefits
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 of
this
 trend is that child comprehensive development has been engaged by various teaching styles with different teachers. Regarding the downside of living in non-identical
places
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 a regular period, some kids do not have
such
abilities
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 to
grap
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grasp
 changes easily which resulted in
culture
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 shock phenomenon.
Furthermore
, those who
shifting
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shifted
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 areas frequently would meet trouble in forming new friendships, as they lost their old friends. To
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,
due to
 globalization, many kids have been shifted to various
places
 as their parents’ job demands.
Although
 there is
plethora
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 of advantages, it still
have
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 some disadvantages for those actions.
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