The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this Statement?
In
this
contemporary era, some individuals consider that the initial target for scientists have
to be improving people's Change the verb form
has
lives
, I certainly disagree with this
attitude. In this
essay, I will support my idea and I'm going to give some examples.
Firstly
, in this
century, we have had sharp
increase Correct article usage
a sharp
about
science, Change preposition
in
researchers
Correct word choice
and researchers
try
to find ways to improve Wrong verb form
trying
individual's
Change noun form
individual
lives
. But it means that if they had chance
to do that we would face lots of problems Add an article
a chance
the chance
such
as pollution,housing and transportation etc ,moreover
in this
recent time
many countries have had pollution Fix the agreement mistake
times
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
for example
, the latest research in India has showed
that not only Change the verb form
shown
do
Change the verb form
does
this
country has an environmental errors
but they Correct the article-noun agreement
environmental errors
an environmental error
also
can not manage nutrition need for its folk ,therefore
rising the people's lives
would bring many errors.
On the other hand
, if scientists had find
the solution to Change the verb form
found
rise
Correct your spelling
raise
nation's
Correct article usage
the nation's
lives
it could chance
our lifestyleCorrect your spelling
change
,
because Remove the comma
apply
long
life period is about to give opportunities to start space travels. Correct article usage
a long
Furthermore
, we might chance to built
colonies Change the verb
build
in
other stars which have long Change preposition
on
distance
from our world. Fix the agreement mistake
distances
For instance
, NASA has a plan to send passengers to Mars ,but unfortunately
these days they have restructured because of human's short Add a comma
unfortunately,
life time
,so if scientists improve people's Correct your spelling
lifetime
lives
not only do folks experience long life period but they also
start space travels ,in result it can have advantages too.
In conclusion, increasing number of population because of improving nation's
Correct article usage
the nation's
lives
has lot
of disadvantages like pollution,nutrition Change the article
a lot
and
etc ,but Correct word choice
apply
on the contrary
it can cause to start
space trips. I disagree with Verb problem
apply
this
attitude so its drawbacks are overweight
than benefits.Verb problem
outweigh
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