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the maps below illustrates how frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.

the maps below illustrates how frenton changed from 1990 to 2012.
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The geographical representation depicts the information regarding Frenton in 1990 and changes held in 2012.
Overall
Linking Words
,more spectacular facilities had been introduced in 2012.The bank had been replaced by
restaurant
Correct article usage
a restaurant
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 and trees were chopped down to make Technopark. It is vividly seen that in Frenton in 1990, the library had been situated in the west
direction
Use synonyms
.The bank and school had been located in the northwest
direction
Use synonyms
.
In addition
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, the theatre was located in the south and shops were situated at the southeast corner of the map.There was a high street in the
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 of the map.
Furthermore
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, banks had been replaced by restaurants.There was no change in the location of the school and hospital.The trees were chopped down and in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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place of ,
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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 Technopark was built in 2012.The flats were constructed in the northeast
direction
Use synonyms
.
Moreover
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, the place where shops were located in the southeast
direction
Use synonyms
 was replaced by supermarkets.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words direction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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