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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#think #climate #change #reforms #business #opportunity #businesses
Nowadays, the
change
of
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 world temperature is a controversial issue.
While
 it is believed that many
businesses
 could be destroyed by fixing global warming, I side with those who feel that solving
this
 problem is a chance for many
businesses
. On the one hand, it is argued that addressing
the
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climate
change
 could make some
people
 unemployed. Those in favour of
this
 idea state that one of the main sources of global warming is big factories using fossil as a source of
energy
 to make their products.
For example
,
everyday
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 tons of gasoline is consumed in the building industry to produce bricks.
As a result
, by banning the use of
this
 kind of fuel, a large number of factories could be closed, and many
people
 working in
this
 field have to look for a new job.
Moreover
, they claim that many
car
 drivers could lose their jobs since old
cars
 have an important role in air pollution and increasing dioxide carbon
into
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 the atmosphere.
Thus
, scrapping old
cars
 could incur not only some
low income
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 drivers
,
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 but
also
 could disrupt
people
’s transportation.
However
, efforts to tackle the
climate
change
 obstacles
has
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have
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capability
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the capability
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 to flourish many
businesses
. New sources of
energy
 which are considered safe for the environment will be more popular, and by increasing the demands, the suppliers have to expand their
businesses
 to provide
the
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 need of
the
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society.
For instance
, many new power plants might be built
which
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that
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 work with renewable
energy
,
such
 as wind. In fact, many
people
 can get a job in
this
 new development.
Furthermore
,
climate
change
 reforms could have a positive effect on the
car
 industry.
Car
 companies could use
a
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new technology to make electric
cars
 which are more efficient and less pollutant for the environment. Since
people
 try to have a role in improving environmental issues, they are more interested in buying electric
cars
 which leads to more success for
this
 business. In conclusion,
although
climate
change
 reforms might shut down some old building industries or
car
 companies,
it
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they
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 could succeed
businesses
 using renewable and electric
energy
.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe reforms
resulted
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resulting
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 from
climate
change
 efforts have positive impacts on
businesses
.
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