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Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples

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In the contemporary epoch, there is a heated argument over the issue that environmental protection is mandatory for the social welfare of the economy. There is no iota of doubt that Environmental damage has become a worldwide issue because local authorities are not imposing strict imprisonment
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 the defaulters. A majority of society
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 it and
rest
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 go
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 to it.
This
 essay will
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 perspective which
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 to a logical conclusion. Analyzing the statement, I completely see eye to eye with the given aspect for multifarious reasons. The first and foremost reason is
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 deforestation. People are cutting down
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trees on a large scale to build their homes without any fear of punishment.
Therefore
, natural climate imbalance and an individual
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 from various diseases
such
 as asthma.
Secondly
, smoking habits are increasing day by day because
government
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 do not penalize
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smokers even though they are consuming in public areas which cause air pollution.
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, In developing
countries
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 more than 25
percent
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 of trees are
cuttiing
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cutting
 down with the permission of
government
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the government
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 to expand industrialization which
are
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 exploiting the ecosystem continuously. Moving ahead,
young
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the young
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 generation
are
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 using
loud speakers
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 in their vehicle
as well as
 at
homes
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 on
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 occasion because
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 has given
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 freedom to
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the public
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 to
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 music
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high
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 volume
especially
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 in rural areas.
As a result
, it not only
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 noise pollution but
also
, promote youngsters to destroy the beauty of nature.
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 but not
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least, there is plenty of
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material
is
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used in industrial areas and the waste of the material goes into the river which polluted the water. So, in order to overcome
this
 issue
government
 should give
atleast
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at least
 five
years
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impriosonment
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imprisonment
 to
offendors
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offenders
.
To conclude
, I reiterate there are innumerable strong factors that
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,
environment
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the environment
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 is harming globally
due to
 the unrestricted
government
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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