In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

In today's era, with the growth of
human
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population, there is
a
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increase in the number of elderly
people
. In Britain,
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the governmenthas
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governmenthas
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government has
to take care of old
people
in their retirement
age
. In my opinion,
government
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has to look after them. In the following paragraph,I am going to delve into the reasons behind
this
.
To begin
with, everyone is obliged to pay taxes from an early
age
until they retire. If we consider all the taxes
what
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that
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we pay in our entire life, it is a huge amount of
money
we pay to the
government
. It is paid for the development of society and
people
who help in
everyday
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growth of
country
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.
That is
why
government
officials should spend a big chunk of
money
onold
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on old
age
nursing.
For example
, I remember my grandfather, he used to spend a lot of
money
on taxes
in
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his
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youthful
age
. As he is retired, he needs additional medical and emotional support from his similar
once
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ones
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or nurses and nursing houses are places where he can get
company
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of similar
people
and extra medical support.
Therefore
, the
governmentmust
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government must
start looking after them in
people
’s60s.
Furthermore
, with the growth of family members, there are a greater number of
infant
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take
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birth.
People
have to take care of newborn child upbringing. They already have a huge burden and financial pressure.
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, my father is the only person who earns and pays for everyone's school and day today's
spendings
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. He rarely
getschance
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gets a chance
to spend
money
on himself or my grandfather’s medical expenditures. For that reason, I believe
family
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should not pay for the elderly
people
nursing.
To conclude
,
although
there is regular spending which elderly
people
can manage by themselves but still extra medical
requirement
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requirements
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and emotional support is something
government
has to provide.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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