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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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 that
due to
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owenrship
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ownership
 of cars rapidly and having more than one car in a family, many
cities
 are facing the problem of
traffic
jam
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jams
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. There are several
reaspns
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reasons
 for
such
 a
sitution
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situation
, and
also
 a few visible influences too. Both
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aspects are explained in the following paragraphs Discussing the reasons, the most common one is having the bad conditions of public transport in the
cities
 that force them to think about buying
new
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 car.
This
 is because many
cities
 still have the
less
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busses
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buses
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 available
that
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and
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passagers
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passengers
 have to wait in some cases more
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 hour if they miss a
buss
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bus
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. A good example
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this
 is Collingwood. People can travel fast than buss on cycle. It is
also
 true that they prefer getting new
owenrship
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ownership
 of
car
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cars
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 that cause
big
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traffic
jam
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jams
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 in
cities
. The mentioned reasons have some solutions too. The foremost reason is seen on
this
traffic
 problem is providing more busses and making
new
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 railway track that can
incurge
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encourage
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teenagers to choose
the
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pulic
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public
 transport over private
one
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ones
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.
Moreover
, making new
opportunites
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opportunities
of
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 jobs near
to
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the resedenational area
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would
decrase
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decrease
 the need
of
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 travel. Adding to
this
, shopping centres can
also
 be built near
to
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the living areas.
To conclude
 and
voical
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voice
voiced
 my opinion, I would say that focusing on the need that
make
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 people
to
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travel
everyday
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 from far away from their homes is the most ideal way to deal with
this
situtaion
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situation
. In
big
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 picture,
this
 would
helps
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help
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 to
decarse
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decrease
 the need to buy new cars that will
pervent
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prevent
 from
traffic
 jams.
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