SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT CHILDREN'S LEISURE ACTIVITIES MUST BE EDUCATIONAL, OTHERWISE THEY ARE A COMPLETE WASTE OF TIME. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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Someone reckons these
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spare time must be spent
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, which is in education,
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, Others opt to turn down it,
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, they are towards idle work. In young generations must be two sides, but The most beneficial function is the initial idea, it is selected by me.
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of the first position. They are the followings,
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, If kids pick out the learning, it affects their nurture, their knowledge will be developed or grown by the school's teachers. Not only for their growth, it impacts their tutors but
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their parents' role will be played a big role.
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, they will be open-minded, after reading various books.
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, I am writing that origin my opinion, I had been learning the English language for 8 years,
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time,
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been knowing or coping with the necessary pieces of information step by step related to my field,
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, For being my bright future, I tried to
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as much as possible and it was done support by my close people and teachers If we are going to opt for another condition,
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a waste of time, it is spent on unnecessary activities,
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there are pluses of these,
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of these we might perform utilizable work, it may be related to their jobs. Viewing tv and listening to songs will grant us silence and relaxation, But it does not tackle crucial problems.
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facing me.
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, I will stay with the first circumstance. Because of being effective things, it will increase your criteria and career. So, for achieving our wishes, We have to
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do our best. In the end, We are able to carry out these.
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