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Fossil fuel, such as coal, oil, and natural gas, is extensively used in many countries that cause harm to the environment. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, however, is being encouraged in many countries. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Fossil fuel, namely coal, oil, and natural gas, is
widespread
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 utilized in many nations that cause adverse to the ecosystem . The use of renewable
sources
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 of
energy
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, like wind and solar power,
however
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, is being encouraged in many nations. In my opinion,
encourage
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encouraging
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 employ
the
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apply
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alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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 is a positive development because it
contribute
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contributes
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 to
mitigate
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mitigating
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environmenal
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environmental
 crisis, and
provide
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provides
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people
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.
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of
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using
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non-conventional
sources
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 of
energy
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 is a positive trend.
Firstly
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, renewable
energy
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soruces
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sources
contribute to
alleviate
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 the Co2 footprint on the atmosphere.
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 is because renewable
energy
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work
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works
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 based
in
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on
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 sunlight or wind, which means these natural
resoruces
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resources
 do not have
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detrimetnal
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detrimental
impacts on the environment.
In contrast
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 , fossil fuel,
such
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 as coal, oil, and natural gas
relases
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release
a huge
a
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amonut
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amount
 of Co2
emssions
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emissions
.
Consequently
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, non-conventional
energy
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soruces
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sources
 will contribute to
mitigate
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mitigating
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the
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apply
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environmental issues namely, climate change, global warming, and
raising seal
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rising sea
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 levels, because these environmental issues result
of
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in
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increase
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the increase
an increase
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of
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in
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amount
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the amount
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 of greenhouse gases
in
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on
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 the earth.
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Moreover
, renewable
energy
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 assist to improve
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people
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people's
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 health.
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the
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most
of
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serious diseases
such
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,
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apply
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 cancer,
asthma
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and asthma
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 result
of
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from
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 air pollution.
provide
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 jobs opportunity and income for local
people
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 is another advantage of using alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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. To illustrate, more companies will invest money in renewable
energy
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 projects means more
people
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 will work as,
engieers
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engineers
,
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and labors
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labors
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labourers
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.
Therefore
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,
encourage
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encouraging
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use
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the use
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 of alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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 will assist to reduce the rate of poverty and crime in society.
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, I believe
encourage
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encouraging
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use
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the use
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non-conventional
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of non-conventional
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sources
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 of
energy
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 is a positive development in both
ecosytem
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ecosystem
as well as
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community
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the community
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 because it
tackle
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tackles
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the
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apply
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environmental degradation
such
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,
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apply
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 climate change, global warming,
raising
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and raising
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seal
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sea
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 levels.
In addition
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, it
provide
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provides
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 jobs for individuals

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