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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts provided reveal the proportion of
usage
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 of
water
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 for three distinct aims in six different regions of the globe. Upon a meticulous examination of the given charts, it becomes evident that North
America
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 and Europe are alike in that their most important goal for using
water
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 is industrial
usage
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,
whereas
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South
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in South
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America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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water
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 used is primarily allocated to agriculture
usage
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. As illustrated by the graphs, constituting
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53% and 48% of the charts, industrial
usage
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 is the most significant purpose for using
water
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 in Europe and North
America
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, respectively.
However
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, domestic
usage
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 accounts for 15% and 13% of the whole
water
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usage
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 in these regions, respectively, forming the smallest minority.
By contrast
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, Central
Asia
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, at 88%, allocates most of its
water
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usage
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agriculture
usage
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, and Africa, South East
Asia
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, and South
America
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 are placed in the next ranks, respectively.
Furthermore
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, with the exception of South
America
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 (at 19%), the less crucial
usage
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 of
water
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 belongs to
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domestic
usage
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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