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The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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presents
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 data about
proportion
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the proportion
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 of Europeans
were
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who were
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 influenced by the daily minimum and maximum levels of
noise
 which originated from
traffic
, train, aircraft and
industry
 both in
cities
 and rural areas in 2007.
Overall
, it can be seen from the charts that
traffic
 came out first in terms of
noise
 levels in both
cities
 and
countryside
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the countryside
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,
while
 the opposite was true for
industry
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the industry
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 section.
Firstly
,
traffic
 was overwhelmingly the main source of
noise
 during the day and
night
, which affected 64
millions
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million
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 and 48
millions
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million
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 citizens, respectively. Rural figures for
traffic
noise
 were approximately half as high at 34
millions
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million
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 and 24
millions
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million
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. Turning to
noise
 from
train
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trains
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, in
cities
, 10
millions
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million
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 and 8
millions
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million
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 individuals were impacted
while
 ,in urban areas, the figure
were
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was
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 just true for 8
millions
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million
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 and 6
millions
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million
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 people. Noticeably, aircraft and
industry
 categories seemed likely to have the least impact on the community. In terms of the categories in
cities
, only 4
millions
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million
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 and 1 million of the entire number of Europe residents were disturbed by flights during the day and at
night
, in turn, 2
millions
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million
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 individuals
also
 heard
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 at
night
 in
countryside
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the countryside
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, with half of many aware of daytime flights. The figure for rural
industry
 was
neglible
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negligible
 and in
cities
 stood at 1 million ones influenced by time of day and
night
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, traffic, industry, cities, night, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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