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The graph provides information about the most visited places of Brighton by tourists.

The graph provides information about the most visited places of Brighton by tourists.
The graph provides information about the most visited places
of
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in
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 Brighton by tourists. England is
the
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a
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 place where tourism is one of main the features of
country
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the country
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.And Art Gallery,
Pavilion
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, Pier,
Festival
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and Festival
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 are leading in comparison with other destinations. The
pavilion
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 which started with 23% in 1980
has
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rocked suddenly to 48% in 1995.
Linking Words
However
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 amount of tourists fell and the
Pavilion
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 levelled off to 35%.
Linking Words
Also
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,Also
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 Art Gallery
that
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apply
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started
proobably
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probably
 with 22% as
Pavilion
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 was
wated
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wanted
rated
waited
 for high expectations.
Although
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 in 1990 was
sudden
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a sudden
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 drop and it ended up with
significant
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a significant
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decreas
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decrease
. The Festival that had the highest indicators in the beginning
was
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gradually rise year by year and saved
own
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its own
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 level.
Linking Words
Also
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,Also
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 Pier
that
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apply
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from
start
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the start
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 has wild fluctuation could overtake the Art Gallery.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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