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Some people say that protecting the environment governments responsibility. Other believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #environment #governments #responsibility
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,
me
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it is the
government
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reponsiblility
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responsibility
as well as
 every
individuals
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individual
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reponsible
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responsible
 to
protecte
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protect
the environment. So,
i
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I
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 strongly
belive
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believe
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then
every body
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everybody
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 should protect. My viewpoint
is discusses
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in
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blow
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below
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. My opinion is
discuss
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 in
blow
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 data.
Firstly
, the nation is there
there
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to protect nature
as well as
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the publice
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publice
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public
.
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, if only a community will job only
then
 it will give
also
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good
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 for the states. If
NGO
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NGOs
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 will get support
by
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 the states
then
 they can work more hard and can become easy and fast from them. If the groups will plant
atleast
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at least
 one
trees
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tree
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 per month
then
 it would
better
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be better
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 for the nation.
Person
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People
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 should plant more and more to make
green
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a green
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 city.
Secondly
, it
even
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 the public
responsibe
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responsible
 for taking care of nature.
Thirdly
, if
both
 will job together
the
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 nation and the public
then
 it will be good for
both
.
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, if only the country will take care
about
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a
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trees
than
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then
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 it will be just half good for the community but,
both
 will job together
than
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then
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 it will get
more
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more
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benefits to the
trees
. The country should make
role
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roles
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 like per person there should be one
trees
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tree
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.
NGO
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NGOs
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 should spend aware
about
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of
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importance
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the importance
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.
To conclude
,
hence
, from the blow information it can be said that
both
 people
as well as
 the government responsibility to take care about
a the
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environment.
Thus
, it can be said
both
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is
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needed. From my viewpoint, my opinion is that
both
 should work equally.
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