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The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
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The line graph, covering a ten-year period from 2001 to 2010 depicts the yearly expense of three types of service in the US.
Overall
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, it is evident from the supplied information that cell phone convocation witnessed dramatic growth,
while
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 there was a downward trend in national
fixed-line
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 convocation during the period of the question. In detail, the figure for cell phone
services
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initially
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 stood at 200
million
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 which was the lowest of the three types of service.
By contrast
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, national
fixed-line
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services
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 were in first place with an amount of 700
million
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.
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, cell phone
services
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 experience an approximately four times increase during the decade and took over the place of national
fixed-line
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 in 2006 with around 500
million
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.
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, the figure for national
fixed-line
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services
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 diminished considerably to 400
million
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 and end up in second place. There was a slight increase in international
fixed-line
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services
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 from 2001 to 2003 and reached its peak of 330
million
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 in 2003. After that, it levelled out at 310
million
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 for the rest of seven years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fixed-line, services, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
  • innovation
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