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The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. Do you agree or disagree?
#traffic #transportation #people #cities #suburbs #countryside
The best method to solve the circulation and
problem
 of
transportation
 is to encourage citizens
which
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who
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 live in cities rather than
suburbs
 or countryside. In my opinion, to solve the traffic problems, many other important factors need to be added. On the one hand, some individuals think that
move
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moving
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 from
city
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the city
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 centre to
suburbs
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the suburbs
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 or
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the contryside
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contryside
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countryside
 will help the traffic
problem
 become more improved by some
resons
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reasons
. And the main
reson
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reason
 why some people think so
because
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is because
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 citizens
which
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who
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 live in the
city
,
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apply
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 when they tend to go to the
countryisde
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countryside
 or
suburbs
 will decrease
population
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the population
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 of
big
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the big
a big
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city
 and that think will make
transportation
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the transportation
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problem
 was solved.
On the other hand
, it is so difficult to encourage people to live in the cities
come
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to come
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 to
suburbs
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the suburbs
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 or
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the contryside
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contryside
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countryside
 because in the central
city
, they feel
convinience
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convenient
 and have a higher salary
as
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than
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 they live in the countryside.
Instead
 of advising individuals who live in the cities
come
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to come
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 to
suburbs
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the suburbs
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, we have many
way
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ways
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 which
improve
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improves
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traffic
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the traffic
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problem
.
Firstly
 we can encourage people
use
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to use
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the
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apply
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public transport and reduce costs when taking public transport.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 government need
control
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to control
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 family planning as each family will
has
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have
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a maxium
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maxium
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maximum
 of two children and that way will make
problem
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the problem
a problem
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 of
transportation
 to
be improve
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be improved
be improving
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 significantly. In conclusion, we need more methods and depend on many elements to be improving
problems
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the problems
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 of
transportation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • public transport infrastructure
  • commutes
  • residential density
  • ecological footprint
  • overcrowding
  • urban planning
  • car-sharing
  • traffic management
  • rural preservation
  • transportation policies
  • electric vehicles
  • sustainable living
  • incentivize
  • telecommuting
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