The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

I disagree that Some
people
believe that the encouraging
people
who live in suburbs and countryside should migrate to
cities
to resolve problems about
traffic
fam There are a lot of disadvantages
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to
cities
.
Firstly
. When rural
people
move
to
cities
can increase
traffic
congestion which
make
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roads
on
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city
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more and more
traffic
jam and it
also
can increase air pollution from vehicles
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often
congestion
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on
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the peak time in ha noi.
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they have to deal with overcrowded accommodation and
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poison
chemical
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from industries
on
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cities
this
make
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them have
any
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dangerous diseases.
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near
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.
However
, there are some benefits of rural
people
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to urban to
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traffic
jam
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and transportation.
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with
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when countryside
people
move
to town it
make
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the government require
people
who live in town
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less
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vehicles individuals. Which
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become
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clear and fresh air.
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, they can reduce
traffic
jame
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jam
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by the way they will use transportation.
This
make
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government
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developed
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. In conclusion,
although
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people
move
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to
cities
to
resolved
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traffic
and transportation
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problems
prolems
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problems
,
i
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suppose that there are
also
a
bit
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benefits when
people
who
move
to town
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • public transport infrastructure
  • commutes
  • residential density
  • ecological footprint
  • overcrowding
  • urban planning
  • car-sharing
  • traffic management
  • rural preservation
  • transportation policies
  • electric vehicles
  • sustainable living
  • incentivize
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