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Some people say that music is a good way to bringing people of different cultures and ages together to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Some
people
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 believe that
music
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 is a good way of bringing
people
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 of different nationalities and ages together I completely agree with
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 statement and I will explain it to you with some reasons.
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music
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 is a global language listeners might not understand its meaning . the most enjoyable thing could be its melody. there are many
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 festivals or
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 concerts hold in different countries and the majority of
people
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 attend them apart from culture and nationalities the reason is enjoyment . A prime example would be if a famous singer holds a concert the tickets will be sold out quickly.
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,
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 can share their musical tastes together so that interaction can be easier for them and can improve their communication skills.
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, there are some melodies and
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 that are eternal and nostalgic what I mean is that different
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 regardless of their age and culture love these songs
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 if Michael Jackson who is a very well-known singer holds a concert many
people
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 from all over the world participate in it and enjoy the song and melody. In conclusion,
music
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 is one of the best ways to gather
people
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 and create a great opportunity to communicate and share their musical interests or playlist. they all can love a song irrespective of its meaning
people
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 do not care about the language and concepts the important thing is the enjoyment of them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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