IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#proportion #students #six #subjects #uk #university #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The depicted chart illustrates the division of
students
Use synonyms
 of six various art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.
Students
Use synonyms
 are classified referring to their gender. You can see six different art categories: linguistics, philosophy, English language and literature, history and
archeology
Change the spelling
archaeology
show examples
, art and design, and
at
Change preposition
apply
show examples
last
Linking Words
, communication and media stud. It can clearly be seen that philosophy
occured
Correct your spelling
occurred
occurs
 as the subject chosen by the fewest male
students
Use synonyms
 (50
students
Use synonyms
),
while
Linking Words
 English language and literature was the most common choice in males (230
students
Use synonyms
).
In contrast
Linking Words
, female
students
Use synonyms
chosed
Correct your spelling
choose
chosen
chose
 history and
archeology
Change the spelling
archaeology
show examples
 at least; their favourite
subject
Fix the agreement mistake
subjects
show examples
 was as well English language and literature (250
students
Use synonyms
), closely followed by linguistics (240
students
Use synonyms
), and communication and media stud (225
students
Use synonyms
). As a remarkable fact, any subject was more likely to be voted by females except art and design.
Overall
Linking Words
, women accounted for the most
students
Use synonyms
 in art-related subjects in total,
whereas
Linking Words
 men constituted the minority.
Submitted by i.reichwaldt on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • art-related subjects
  • gender distribution
  • predominate
  • significant
  • gender imbalances
  • percentages
  • comparison
  • balanced distribution
  • data
  • figures
  • trends
  • popular
  • least popular
  • subject choices
  • analyze
  • overview
  • summarize
What to do next:
Look at other essays: