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The line graph below changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

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The provided line graph represents how many
times
 Australian juveniles eat pizza,
fish
 and
chips
 or
hamburgers
 during the
period
 from 1975 to 2000. It is clear from the graph that the most significant trend is the consumption of
hamburgers
 the whole experienced
period
,
as well as
 how many
times
 the younger preferred to eat
fish
 and
chips
. At the beginning of the processing
period
, in 1975, the younger Australians ate 100
times
fish
 and
chips
 in 1975 and
then
 it experienced a downward trend until 1980. At the same time, hamburger and pizza consumption increased steadily until 1985 when teenagers' consumption frequency reached a number of up to 80
times
 of eating
hamburgers
,
whereas
 those who preferred pizza rocketed in 1995 with an equal proportion.
Finally
, in the
last
 5 years of the examined
period
, both aforementioned trends continued steadily, whilst Australian-eaten
fish
 and
chips
 recorded a sudden decline until 2000 when it was submerged 40
times
 per year.
Overall
, it is evident from the graph that the most preferable fast food was
fish
 and
chips
 and
hamburgers
 in different periods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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