The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The depicted chart illustrates the three mainly reported issues among citizens in six
cities
in the UK in 2008 in percentages. The accounted issues were health
service, education
and training, and air
pollution
.
It can clearly be seen that air
pollution
was the least significant issue in all presented cities
as being
Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, Manchester, Glasgow, and London. It is allocated only for approximately 5% to 15%. Unnecessary verb
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In contrast
, education
and air
pollution
are revealed to be a much graver issue in all cities
, ranging from 45% to almost 60%. The most significant issue in the whole chart referred to health
services in Belfast and Cardiff (almost 60%, respectively). Remarkably, health
services were only overtaken by education
and training in two
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metropoliscentermunicipalitydowntownplacecapitalcities: Glasgow and London.
To sum up
, inhabitants of the largest cities
in the UK seemed to care more about health
services as well as
education
and training than about air
pollution
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, health, education, air, pollution with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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