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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The depicted chart illustrates the three mainly reported issues among citizens in six
cities
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 in the UK in 2008 in percentages. The accounted issues were
health
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 service,
education
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 and training, and
air
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pollution
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. It can clearly be seen that
air
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pollution
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 was the least significant issue in all presented
cities
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Newcastle, Belfast, Birmingham, Cardiff, Manchester, Glasgow, and London. It is allocated only for approximately 5% to 15%.
In contrast
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,
education
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 and
air
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pollution
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 are revealed to be a much graver issue in all
cities
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, ranging from 45% to almost 60%. The most significant issue in the whole chart referred to
health
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 services in Belfast and Cardiff (almost 60%, respectively). Remarkably,
health
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 services were only overtaken by
education
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 and training in two YOU USE
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 WORD TOO OFTEN, CONSIDER REPLACING IT WITH metropoliscentermunicipalitydowntownplacecapitalcities: Glasgow and London.
To sum up
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, inhabitants of the largest
cities
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 in the UK seemed to care more about
health
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 services
as well as
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education
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 and training than about
air
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pollution
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, health, education, air, pollution with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant issue
  • high percentage
  • real estate market
  • traffic congestion
  • transportation issues
  • urban areas
  • health services
  • dissatisfaction
  • healthcare facilities
  • crime rates
  • safety
  • law enforcement
  • education and employment issues
  • job market
  • educational systems
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