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You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: •explain your situation •describe your problems •tell him/her when you think you can move in

#move #apartment #month #landlord #•explain #situation #•describe #•tell
Dear Sir, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that it will be difficult for me to move to your premises
on
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 the start of next
month
. Let me start by telling my reason: My current workplace, where I am working right now, Has demanded an additional
month
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month's
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 notice,
due to
 the delay
of
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in
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 handing over my duties to the new employee.
Although
,
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 It is nowhere written in my employment contract to extend my tenure any
furhter
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further
, still I have been forced to continue to serve them. Speaking about the consequences, I will not be issued with a fair testimonial on my
last
 working day, if I would deny their request to
further
 educate the new staff for an additional
month
 period.
Furthermore
, they would
also
 proceed to deduct the training expenses, whatever will
occured
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occurred
occur
 to educate their new employee, from my
last
 earning income from
this
 company.
Nevertheless
, It has been confirmed by them that
although
 they are requesting to extend the period for a
month
, it will not go beyond 10 days, and I will be allowed to move out soon
after
this
 training gets over, and I would still be receiving the whole
month
 salary, despite the number of days that I have worked during
this
 period. Thank you for
you
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 understanding and I await
for
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your positive response to my situation. Regards James
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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