More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution. 

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
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Private
cars
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have been in
use
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for decades as
people
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’s means of transportation
instead
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of public
transport
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such
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as
bus
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buses
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,
train
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trains
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, and
taxi
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taxis
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.
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habit has contributed to some problems
of
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in
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their
environments
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environment
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including the increase
of
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in
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fuel
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use
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,
air
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pollution
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, and traffic jam. The increase
of
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in
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fuel
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use
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can give rise to
the
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apply
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more
fuel
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produced by exploiting dead fossil remains under the sea which
are
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called
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non-renewable
energy
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.
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energy
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will vanish in the coming future if more and more explorations are conducted. When
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non-renewable
energy
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disappears,
people
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can neither drive their
cars
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nor
use
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public
transport
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for daily
accomodation
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accommodation
.
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,
people
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should lessen the
use
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of private
cars
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, and shift their habit to using public
transport
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instead
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private
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of private
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vehicles to save more
fuel
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as the non-renewable
energy
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on earth.
Air
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pollution
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has
also
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become one of the effects of using private
cars
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because the more vehicles are used, the more
pollution
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they cause. When
people
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drive their own
cars
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, it certainly produces more carbon dioxide
to
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the
air
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going up
to
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into
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the atmosphere resulting in the increasing
tempearature
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temperature
temperatures
on the earth. The hotter the earth, the more uncomfortable
people
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live.
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,
people
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had better
use
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public
transport
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to decrease the number of
air
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pollution
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in the atmosphere. The next problem caused by the overreliance
of
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on
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private
cars
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is traffic
jam
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jams
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. It is one of the disturbing
aspect
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aspects
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of
people
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’s daily lives as it sticks drivers on the street for quite a long time making workers or students come late to work or
schools
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school
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and
contribute
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contributing
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to more
air
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pollution
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as well.
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, public
transport
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can be a solution to
this
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problem. In summary,
people
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need to decrease their overreliance
to
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on
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private
cars
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and shift to using public
transport
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for
better
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a better
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environment.
Healthy
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environment contributes to
people
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’s healthy lives.
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, considering the problems caused by private
cars
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,
people
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had better start using public
transport
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as their daily accommodation.
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