The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table gives information concerning the proportion of
students
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four secondary school types from 2000 to 2009.
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it is clear that
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the proportion of pupils attending
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schools
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declined the most. Meanwhile, the share of
students
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attending community
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increased the most. Looking at the table more closely, one can see that the
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had the highest rate of
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among the four types of
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. the figure was more than 50%.
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, the share of
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in specialist
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and community
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was 12%.
after
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this
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time the volume of
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in specialist
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remained constant over the period. But community
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had
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increase in the number of pupils in 2009. The figure was almost five times higher than in 2000. The proportion of Grammar
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schools
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students
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in 2000 has halved compared to 2000. In 2009, the size of three
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of
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(specialist, grammar,
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voluntary-controlled
) combined(42%) was smaller than the volume of pupils attending
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voluntary-controlled
schools
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(58%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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