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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

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It is true that some specific courses are popular for just one gender in some schools and universities.
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 is a serious problem, it can be solved by offering education to change old beliefs. The main reason for the creation of preferred
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 by sex is obsolete and inflexible thoughts from ancestors. In the past, girls were educated to become calm and quiet,
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 boys were taught to devote themselves to our society in the workforce.
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, females are likely to choose
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 related to art
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 males prefer to opt for scientific degrees. Take the example of the Nobel prize, most of the winners of the Nobel prize, especially in physics and chemistry
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, are men, taking up more than 90
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 of its total.
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 belief transferred until now, that it makes
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 think that they need to fit into an old conviction, resulting in a narrow point of view.
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, there is a solution to
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 problem. By educating
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, they can change their minds and re-think their future majors or
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. Educational facilities can provide some programs which teach about equality between men and women.
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 will allow
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 to have proper conviction, which makes them choose any kinds of subject that they want to learn. Regardless of their gender,
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 now are able to earn a degree based on their interests.
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 an obsolete belief made
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 choose specific
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 and it is proper education that can solve
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 problem and gives them equal opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • career paths
  • traditional stereotypes
  • unconscious bias
  • role models
  • learning styles
  • analytical skills
  • inclusive environment
  • gender balance
  • diversifying perspectives
  • socio-cultural norms
  • self-fulfilling prophecy
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