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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Many advertising
firms
 frequently highlight that the
advertisement
 of the manufacturing made
include
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includes
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 new
properties
 in some way recently.
While
 making
advertisement
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advertisements
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, they use
this
 method because people prefer to buy if
product
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the product
a product
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 has cutting-edge solutions or some new
properties
. I would feel that
this
 development is positive because of two reasons.
Firstly
, the
firms
 must come up with new solutions or
properties
 if they want to sell their
product
.
For
this
 reason, several
firms
 become willing to invest
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R&D sector
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.
At the end
 of the years or decades, the
technology
 is enhanced,
after
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 that
the
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life is effortlessly improved through technological advancements. In conclusion, as
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advertising
firms
 continue to raise innovations of
product
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products
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, many people buy innovative
product
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products
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 by being
influencing
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from
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by
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 them so that the
advertisement
 companies propel the
firms
 into making
investment
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investments
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.
This
 leads to the development of
technology
.
Secondly
, as we quickly realize when we are thinking unless the latter
of
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product
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the product
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differ
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differs
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the
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from the
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 former version of
its
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it
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, not all people will buy the same
product
 because they have no
reasons
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reason
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 for buying. Since the
advertisement
 companies aim to increase
a
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the
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 ratio of
selling
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sales
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, even if the
product
 does not
considerable
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considerably
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 differentiate it from
previous
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the previous
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 version, they have to stress the
product
 surpassed the former
comparing
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by comparing
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 various facet.
Otherwise
, the
product
 may not sell. Ultimately,
this
also
give
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gives
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 rise to the progressing
technology
.
To conclude
, every
product
 made is created to sell
that
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which
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 is why advertising
firms
 underline new
properties
.
This
 begets
to
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apply
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the development of
technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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