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The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given table shows information about the proportion of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. The data from the table is described
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, in the Specialist schools in the
year
2000
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 there was 12%, in the
year
 2005 there was 11% and in the
year
 2009 there was 10%.
Secondly
, in the grammar school in the
year
,2000 there was 24%, in the
year
 2005 there was 19% and in the
year
 12%.
Thirdly
, in the voluntary-controlled in the
year
2000
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 there was 52%, in the
year
 2005 there was 38% and in the
year
 2009 there was 20%.
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, in the community school in
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2000
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 there was 12%, in
the
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2005 there was 32% and in
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2009 there was 58%. In a community ,
insitution
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 compared to others. In conclusion, the above data show information about three years.
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