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Some people believe tat the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefits the economies of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A particular group of citizens believe that large-scale international
companies
 play an instrumental role in uplifting the economic strength of 2nd
world
companies
. The rest strongly agree that corporation giants are catastrophic.
This
 essay will describe macroscale
companies
' negative aspects of the environment. It will
also
 highlight the positive outcomes on the economies of poorer countries. Large industries tend to overexploit natural resources and disrupt the ecosystem by polluting the environment. They release massive amounts of carbon dioxide and sulphur into the atmosphere resulting in smog and an increase in lung disease. Thereby, destroying the planet we live in
For example
, China has the greatest number of foreign macro-scale
companies
due to
 the availability of cheap labour. It was recently reported that 70 per cent of rivers in China have been significantly contaminated leading to a foreseeable water crisis.
On the other hand
, industries
also
 boost a 2nd
world
 nation's economy by increasing the number of jobs available. Massive
companies
 set up factories and manufacturing units in 2nd
world
 countries
due to
 cheap labour, which indirectly
also
 helps to improve the work environment, minimum wage and housing facilities.
For instance
, China has been promoted from a 2nd
world
 county to a 1 st
world
 country
due to
 the profits acquired through foreign multinational
companies
.  In my opinion, multinational
companies
 help in improving the
amount
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number
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 of resources to poorer nations
while
alos
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also
 improving the technologies
availble
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available
 in other countries.
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