The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the poplulation age 65 and above in three countries.

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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the poplulation age 65 and above in three countries.

Robert Snowden: Some people think that people are naturally gifted to be a leader. Others, however argue that anyone can learn leadership. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people assert that the main cause of crime is an economically disadvantaged background. However, others say that crime is caused by a person's nature. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

Write to the company. In your letter •Describe what you purchased •Explain why you are not happy with the purchase • Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation

Some company sponsors sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think that it is good, while others think there are disavantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?