Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Art
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and culture are part of our everyday
life
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, even
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if we
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are not noticed it.
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TV, listening
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a music
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or just walking on the street — all elements of daily
life
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influenced
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are influenced
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by
art
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and creative decisions.
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, I personally agree that government should
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in
art
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appropriately Here I’ll give several examples
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of why
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. First of all,
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in
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art
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could gain more benefits in the future, because it could be an instrument to behave and improve
the
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society and build positive social
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.
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extremely important in that period of global internet fast development.
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, now everyone can find any kind of information right
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their phones. But how to understand, how to build clear mindfulness that what we looking at couldn’t
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or could bring regression
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our
life
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?
Art
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gives
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feeling of right impact and can learn how to interact with new in our
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.
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, through
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art
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and
it
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implementation in
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the educational
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system children and young adults could have
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the possibility
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to learn more political and historical aspects of their country, with the help to keep and hold traditional cultural activities
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that help
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people who live in society find their national
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self-identification
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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