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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
It is said raising the
price
 of
fuel
 is
the
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an
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 effective method to tackle
traffic
jams
 and contamination issues. I totally agree with
this
 statement because
increase
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increasing
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 the
price
 of
fuel
 will demotivate
people
 to
use
 their
cars
, which means
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
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traffic
jams
 and
air
pollution
,
however
, I would like to recommend
alternative
 solutions in
order
alleviate
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to alleviate
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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 including,
encourage
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encouraging
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people
 to
use
 public
transport
, and
promte
Correct your spelling
promote
 online working. On the one hand, I believe
the
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apply
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increasing the
price
 of
fuel
 can contribute to
mitigate
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mitigating
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traffic
 congestion
as well as
air
pollution
. Regarding
traffic
jams
,
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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price
 of petrol can discourage individuals to
use
 their vehicles, which means
people
 will
use
alternative
transport
 namely, trains, buses, and subways.
Therefore
, raising the
price
 of
fuel
to contribute
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contributes
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 to
reduce
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reducing
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 the number of
cars
 on our roads, and
help
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helps
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 to
easy
Correct your spelling
ease
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traffic
.
Furthermore
,
less
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fewer
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cars
 on our roads mean less
air
pollution
.
This
 is because the most of Co2 emissions
comes
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come
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 from using
people
 their
cars
.
Consequently
, less
air
pollution
 will contribute to
mitigate
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mitigating
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 climate change and global warming.
On the other hand
, I would like to suggest
alternative
 measures in
order
 to
addressing
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address
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 the issues related
traffic
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to traffic
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 and
pollution
. The first efficient solution,
the
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is the
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 government could make
improvments
Correct your spelling
improvements
 in public
transport
 in
order
 to incentivize
people
 to
use
 it rather than
their
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apply
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use
cars
.
For example
, the government can improvements in
order
 to make the buses and trains faster and
affordable
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more affordable
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.
Promote
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Promoting
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the
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apply
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telecommuting is another effective solution. The government could encourage
the
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apply
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companies to allow their employees to work from home.
As a result
,
this
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these
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 steps can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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 the number of vehicles , which means
less
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fewer
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traffic
jams
as well as
air
 contamination.
To sum up
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement because raising the
price
 of petrol will demotivate individuals to utilize their
cars
, which means less
traffic
 congestion and
air
 contamination,
however
, I suggested some
alternative
 solutions in
order
mitigate
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to mitigate
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this
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these
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issues namely , encourage
people
 to
use
 public
transport
, and
promte
Correct your spelling
promote
 remotely working.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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