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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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It is said raising the
price
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 of
fuel
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 is
the
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an
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 effective method to tackle
traffic
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jams
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 and contamination issues. I totally agree with
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 statement because
increase
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increasing
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 the
price
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 of
fuel
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 will demotivate
people
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 to
use
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 their
cars
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, which means
less
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fewer
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traffic
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jams
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 and
air
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pollution
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,
however
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, I would like to recommend
alternative
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 solutions in
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alleviate
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to alleviate
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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 including,
encourage
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encouraging
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people
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 to
use
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 public
transport
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, and
promte
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promote
 online working. On the one hand, I believe
the
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apply
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increasing the
price
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 of
fuel
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 can contribute to
mitigate
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mitigating
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traffic
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 congestion
as well as
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air
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pollution
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. Regarding
traffic
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jams
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,
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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price
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 of petrol can discourage individuals to
use
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 their vehicles, which means
people
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 will
use
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alternative
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transport
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 namely, trains, buses, and subways.
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, raising the
price
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 of
fuel
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to contribute
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contributes
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 to
reduce
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reducing
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 the number of
cars
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 on our roads, and
help
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helps
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 to
easy
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ease
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traffic
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.
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,
less
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fewer
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cars
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 on our roads mean less
air
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pollution
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.
This
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 is because the most of Co2 emissions
comes
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come
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 from using
people
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 their
cars
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.
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, less
air
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pollution
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 will contribute to
mitigate
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 climate change and global warming.
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, I would like to suggest
alternative
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 measures in
order
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 to
addressing
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address
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 the issues related
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traffic
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to traffic
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 and
pollution
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. The first efficient solution,
the
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is the
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 government could make
improvments
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improvements
 in public
transport
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 in
order
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 to incentivize
people
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 to
use
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 it rather than
their
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apply
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use
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cars
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.
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, the government can improvements in
order
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 to make the buses and trains faster and
affordable
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more affordable
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.
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the
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apply
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telecommuting is another effective solution. The government could encourage
the
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apply
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companies to allow their employees to work from home.
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,
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this
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these
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 steps can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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 the number of vehicles , which means
less
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fewer
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traffic
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jams
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as well as
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air
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 contamination.
To sum up
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, I strongly agree with
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 statement because raising the
price
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 of petrol will demotivate individuals to utilize their
cars
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, which means less
traffic
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 congestion and
air
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 contamination,
however
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, I suggested some
alternative
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 solutions in
order
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mitigate
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to mitigate
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this
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these
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issues namely , encourage
people
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 to
use
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 public
transport
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, and
promte
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promote
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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