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The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph gives information about how many
shops
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 closed and the
number
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 of new
shops
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 in a country from 2011 to 2018. From an
overall
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 perspective, in 2011, the most
shops
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 were opened and the least
shops
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 were closed in 2015. Getting back to details, the year 2011 was a peak time for
shop
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 openings and there were about 8500
shops
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. In 2012, the
number
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 of
shop
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 openings fell dramatically to 4000. From 2012 to 2014, there was a gradual incline between 4000 and 6000. The period between 2015 and 2016 had stable
shop
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 openings and there were 4000
shops
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. The rest years, which were the period from 2017 and 2018 had a declined rate. The
number
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 of closures,
it
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fluctuated a lot
overthe
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over the
7 years. There was a boom for closures in 2013 and at that time over 7000
shops
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 were closed. In 2015, the
number
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 of
shop
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 closures decreased significantly to 1000
shops
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. In 2016, it increased back to over 5000
shops
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. There was only a small amount of changes between 2016 and 2018 and it was around 5000
shops
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number, shop with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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